Cymorill

Take me to the desert
Where there’s got to be
A whole heap of nothing
For you and me
Take me to the desert
Take me to the sand
Show me the colour of your right hand.

Love is a temple
Love is a shrine
Buy some love at the five and dime
A little bit of love
From the counter store
Get it on credit if you need some more.
I’ll the figure of your dis…[Read more]

surely once we make the desicion to post a peice of poetry we allow others the right to comment on that peice of work, no matter how personal it may be. we open ourselves up to criticism and others opinions and we have to accept good and bad comments from everyone.

like i said before i would rather someone be honest about my writing than pretend…[Read more]

well feel free to say what you like about my stuff, i promise i wont go and stick my head into a vat of acid. :wink: :lol:

i think poetry still has to be asthetically appealing, some poetry can be almost as bad as listening to fingernails on a chalkboard. just makes you wish youd never started to read it. i think you can criticise someone honestly and still be tactful about it. there is a difference to being constructive and personally attacking someones work i think.

i would rather someone be completely honest and say what they thought rather than tell me they really liked my work just to be nice. if no one criticises your work you dont know where you are going wrong. if you cant take criticism then you shouldnt allow your work to be published or seen. i am lucky i think my work is crap anyway so any postive…[Read more]

Fave Authors Steven King, Clive Barker, Tolkein, Stephen Donaldson, Anne Mcaffery, Anne Rice, Edgar Allen Poe, Charles Dickens, Daphne Du Maurier.

Fave Books, any from the above mentioned, oh and more recently The Da Vinci Code.

Recommendations, i’d recommend The Chronicle of Thomas Covenant by Stephen Donaldson, a must read for any tolkein…[Read more]

I was born a child of grace
Nothing else about the place
Everything was ugly but your beautiful face
And it left me no illusion

I saw you in the curve of the moon
In the shadow cast across my room
You heard me in my tune
When I just heard confusion

All because of you
All because of you
All because of you
I am… I am

I like the sound of my own v…[Read more]

with a stroke of charcoal she draws the outline
that strong black shape that will hold the colours
of her heart

smudging the canvas as she works
she adds a stroke here and a line there
building up the picture

smokey eyes gaze down at her
showing the tenderness within though
not yet brought to life

a flash of colour as she smooths on oils
the…[Read more]

:lol: :lol: needs more work see me after class. :wink:

right enough spamming on someones creative efforts. :)

observer, i wasnt aware that it was a creative writing exercise, as for me having egg on my face, not at all, a criticism is still a criticism regardless of the content. i think she has a talent, and personally i reckon she should give up the classes and just write from her soul, writing cannot be forced, it should flow naturally, it is the only…[Read more]

i hope you dont mind some criticism that may make this sound slightly better??

try replacing the word spake with spoke it will make it sound more natural, and the line “the farther i dared to follow the path he led”, is a tad too long i feel, it could be shortened to simply the farther i dared to follow.

with the next line, “all the while…[Read more]

Inside the doors are sealed to love
Inside my heart is sleeping
Inside the fingers of my glove
Inside the bones of my right hand
Inside it’s colder than the stars
Inside the dogs are weeping
Inside the circus of the wind
Inside the clocks are filled with sand
Inside she’ll never hurt me
Inside the winter’s creeping
Inside the compass of the…[Read more]

In the moonlight
When the shadows play
When the thought of what could happen
Takes your breath away
Sighs and whispers
Quiet laughter in the air
Unspoken invitations everywhere

In the moonlight
All the words you say
Make it relatively easy
To be swept away
In the half-light
Can we trust the way we feel
Can we be sure that anything is real?

Stars…[Read more]

daydreamer get a hold of yourself
before you dream your life away
daydreamer live your life day by day
dont make plans for the future

all your dreams seem to crumble and fall
before you get to live them
where is the sense in it all
you’ll never get to see them

daydreamer you have to live for today
there may be no tomorrow
daydreamer just let it…[Read more]

Be hold the way our fine feathered friend
His virtue doth parade
Thou knowest not my dim witted friend
The picture thou hast made
Thy vacant brow and thy tousled hair
Conceal thy good intent
Thou noble upright, truthful, sincere
And slightly dopey gent

You’re my funny valentine
Sweet comic valentine
You make me smile with my heart
Your looks a…[Read more]

thanks angel, have read some of your work and i must say you have quite a talent there. :D

I thought you’d be out of my mind
And I’d finally found a way to learn to live without you
I thought it was just a matter of time
Till I had a hundred reasons not to think about you

But it’s just not so
And after all this time, I still can’t let go

I’ve still got your face
Painted on my heart
Scrawled upon my soul
Etched upon my memory, b…[Read more]

Whenever I Say Your Name

Sting

Whenever I say your name, whenever I call to mind your face
Whatever bread’s in my mouth, whatever the sweetest wine that I
taste
Whenever your memory feeds my soul, whatever got broken becomes
whole
Whenever I’m filled with doubts that we will be together

Wherever I lay me down, wherever I put my head to…[Read more]

Its been a long road, getting from there to here.
Its been a long time, but my time is finally near.
And I can feel the change in the wind right now. Nothings in my way.
And theyre not gonna hold me down no more, no they’re not gonna hold me down.

Cause Ive got faith of the heart.
Im going where my heart will take me.
Ive got faith to believe. I…[Read more]

to be honest i find the double standards involved with peoples views to do with breastfeeding in public a little odd, i mean lets face it the very same feeding devices are in practically every daily newspaper, so why are women made to feel like they are doing something wrong when feeding in public?

as to breast feeding a child at 8 or 9 i do…[Read more]