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Good one william, i fear really big people sitting on me :shock:

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Mmmm very different :)

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Lovely Pam, the music was abit loud (perhaps that had something to do with my volume level) :roll:

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Short and sweet Pam darlin, and i like the picture of Angelina Jolie :D

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I actually don’t know why i did this one it just popped into my head, and i wrote it quickly. Weird somethimes how that happens :shock: :lol:

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Cheers william mate, i don’t think i will go with your verse, because i feel the verse loses its human feel. The fact it feels like one of us – ALIVE – makes it that more powerful.

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Sh!t sorry to hear that William mate, Time doesn’t heal those sort of wounds. Hope you keep your head up though, not all people point the finger.

Good poem by the way, and I hate to point out a couple of typos :lol:

So i won’t

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Cheers AW and William for the comments.

I’m not to happy with this verse

Slicing through my veins
Cutting through my torso
My blood weeps
There is nothing I can do

Especially the word torso, think it throws it out to far.

Might have to re write that verse :D

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I was just thinking of writing a poem called the stairway to heaven the other down, after i copied a picture from the net, and believe it or not it was the same picture you have used. How mad is that. Oh well you beat me to it.

Liked the poem, though not entirely sure what “Constellating my love for you” means

might have to check out the word, i take it, it is as in reference to the constellation.

Could you be trying to say you’d glitter your your love across the sky.

Please tell me i am entrigued

Very nice though AW darlin. :D

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