[jen_jen]

Heart beating like drums
sounding the tattoo as I
lie, yearning your touch.

Hearing you arrive,
I flush, anticipation
overwhelming me.

Fantasy come true,
we embrace and absorb each
other till sated.

Do haikus presented together form a poem? :-k

[jen_jen]

So basically please read my poem but if you don’t think it’s lovely then don’t say anything at all. OK got it.

If anyone reads my haikus or any poems I choose to share and thinks there is room for improvement I welcome the feedback…except for the one for Dawn, that stays as is. :D

[jen_jen]

So you only want people to say a poem is lovely even if they can see room for improvement?

[jen_jen]

Winter sunset, a
jewel shining brightly in
a brooding dark sky.

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Christmas joy surrounds
a woman bereft, grieving,
so distant and numb.

– for my friend Dawn

[jen_jen]

Like the Spring sunshine
Your soft smile touches my heart
And lifts my spirits.

[jen_jen]

lol ok ok!
Maybe we should have a haiku thread and leave this for the more accepted poetry?

[jen_jen]

Words escape me, gone,
Emotions wash over me
Then leave me bereft.

[jen_jen]

Harsh winter winds blow,
The leaves from the trees float down.
Time to get the rake!

Sorry, I tried to be serious but couldn’t :oops:

[jen_jen]

@a certain sadness wrote:

I can feel a haiku coming on..

Go for it :D

I might even join you…

[jen_jen]

If you only want people to say your poetry is lovely then only show it to those that you think will say that, but then don’t expect your poetry writing skills to improve either.

If, however, you choose to put your poetry in the public domain then you must expect some to point out where there is room for improvement…constructive criticism. That does not make someone a troll, it makes them someone who cares enough to want to give input. If you choose to ignore it, that is your choice. If such feedback hurts too deeply then maybe you are better off not putting it in the public domain. Or maybe you need to put a statement at the end along the lines of you do not want any feedback, in which case I would ask why are you sharing it?

And if people have stopped posting as they used to in case someone might disagree with them, well quite frankly they need to grow a thicker skin, it’s a big bad world out there.

I would welcome more poetry but I reserve the right to not say how wonderful it is if I don’t feel that way.

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