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Ahem

That’s why I love it! :D/

@a certain sadness wrote:

We all see things differently jen as i guess there would be no point in message boards if we didnt. :wink:

Indeed. I often think that you will see what you look for…if you look for good you will see good, if you look for bad you will see bad. It is my way to always assume positive intent until proven otherwise and…[Read more]

I think I must be reading a different message board to to other people as I’m not seeing what they’re seeing… :?

Hmmmmm revisiting it now I think it’s three haikus on a theme. Interesting thought though…

Heart beating like drums
sounding the tattoo as I
lie, yearning your touch.

Hearing you arrive,
I flush, anticipation
overwhelming me.

Fantasy come true,
we embrace and absorb each
other till sated.

Do haikus presented together form a poem? :-k

So basically please read my poem but if you don’t think it’s lovely then don’t say anything at all. OK got it.

If anyone reads my haikus or any poems I choose to share and thinks there is room for improvement I welcome the feedback…except for the one for Dawn, that stays as is. :D

So you only want people to say a poem is lovely even if they can see room for improvement?

Winter sunset, a
jewel shining brightly in
a brooding dark sky.

*******************************

Christmas joy surrounds
a woman bereft, grieving,
so distant and numb.

– for my friend Dawn

Like the Spring sunshine
Your soft smile touches my heart
And lifts my spirits.

lol ok ok!
Maybe we should have a haiku thread and leave this for the more accepted poetry?

Words escape me, gone,
Emotions wash over me
Then leave me bereft.

Harsh winter winds blow,
The leaves from the trees float down.
Time to get the rake!

Sorry, I tried to be serious but couldn’t :oops:

@a certain sadness wrote:

I can feel a haiku coming on..

Go for it :D

I might even join you…

If you only want people to say your poetry is lovely then only show it to those that you think will say that, but then don’t expect your poetry writing skills to improve either.

If, however, you choose to put your poetry in the public domain then you must expect some to point out where there is room for improvement…constructive criticism. That…[Read more]

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@mellow wrote:

F##K OFF

That doesn’t rhyme or have rhythm [-(

Not yet but I’ve heard about it :wink:

(thinks: phew he didn’t recognise me! :oops: )

Shouldn’t have gone to that bondage club afterwards then… :-

Wonder if certy survived? 8-[